Feedback return for Rivkah

I hope you can see all comments yellow too

I think all the earlier comments I made in previous email are paramount.
Be brave enough to let it move your project around a little, even though you have done sone great first steps on detailing and communication.

Other than that I can really see a good project in here, but you need much more care in the specifics lest it remain a purely white-space paper project.
Make it hyper real

Return to Emma

Make sure you find all my little notes in yellow

You need to put a whole lot more detail in. It's currently including less than 50%

Very interesting project but underground floor needs complete work through or work around

I think you still haven't resolved or really considered the full scale if this potentially busy civic space

Work in a structural logic now
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PDFs via email please

Hi everyone
Thanks to those that already posted their work
could you possibly also send me your PDFs via email? posterous is not happening here. Hope you're all well
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Rivkah's Intrum 3 Presentation

Hi Ammon,
 
You're in CHINA - stop thinking about class!!
Hope you're having a blast at the wedding!!!??
 
Attached is my intrum 3 presentation...
 
Feedback on areas to move foward are:
 
- To REALLY develop the interior space - and not make it such a 'monolithic experience'
- As we discussed in class to change the circulation path at the undercroft end so it's not triangular but instead 'squared off' - thus also giving a circulation heiracy to flinders/swanston street.
- I personally want to develop the materiality/haptic interactions/spacial interactions of the 'journey'
- and get into further sturtural detailing.
 
PS - the crit was good - there was general feedback that it was refreshing having 2 CRITS - and thus more detailed, critical and constructive feedback! Tim was a superstar yesterday - it was another LONG sesh! The man's got it under control - so ENJOY YOUR BREAK!
 
Xx
Rivkah